Tuesday, January 10, 2012
How do you feel about the first chapter of this book?
Except for dates, you're not supposed to use numbers in full. You have no introduction to the eventfulness of the virus being unleashed. You don't explain how the virus was unleashed, you have a lot of sentences that should be one. You haven't melded all the the information and detail very well. You shouldn't use parenthesis where two commas can be used for the same effect. There aren't any characters. There isn't any dialog. You haven't described - in great detail, mind you - how the world functions 23 years later. This cannot be worth a chapter, this might work as an introduction or a synopsis; a suggestion of a book/plot.
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