Do you like this excerpt from my book?

Yes, I did, very much so. I agree with the first poster...Normally, I would have a problem with such short, clipped sentences...but in this context, I didn't even notice it until I saw that comment. The way you wrote it makes the reader go through it faster; it's easy to imagine it as it happens. Very nice job on this. Though I am confused...You said that she was riding Nighting Gale, but in the story, Lizzy lets her go and runs.